The Jade Silver

Feb 28 2008  | Views 328 |  Comments  (22)
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  keyaa1 posted 4 mnths ago

Requiem

This was a story based on a real incidence in a different atmosphere, so I did not want to change.
But yes when I wrote it and read again I too felt that it seemed forced. And then I realised that my stories are following a set pattern which means I should stop and take a break from writing or try something different. And as wishes sometimes are horses I will most probably have to stop writing for some time at least. May be what ever happens happens for the best ...at least I feel it that way.



  requiem posted 4 mnths ago

it was great for me, till I got to the point where villagers threatened to kill Kay... yeah, it really took me out of the story... it was not part of the story, felt almost forced, Dues Ex Machina... read rest of it and all's well... still, that part of story really felt out of character... it was like introducing peril just for the sake of it... and somehow that set in stone how rest of story would turn out... all in all, a brilliant idea... could have been much better in execution... maybe just me... but I got the feeling instead of that ridiculous sounding threat to kill and all... it could have been done differently... not being pretentous here, but something like what the sculptor in my latest does... that would have made better sense... want me to spell it out?? how I would have ended this??? rather, how I would have gotten to the end you got? ending is right, not how you get there...

but then, they're just my views... I just said what the story seemed to complain to me about d:



  keyaa1 posted 4 mnths ago


Bijya Ghosh

Thanks for you encouraging words. I am so happy you liked the tale I wrote. Keep coming.




writer at heart

Thanks for you kind words. I am happy you like this story.



  Bijaya Ghosh posted 4 mnths ago

There was a dark mysterious magic which glistened with the small flowers of stars stuck on the black canvas of the sky.

 The most amazing fairy tale. enjoyed every word of it.



  writer at heart posted 5 mnths ago

WELL NARATED.VERY NICE.KEEP IT UP.GOD BLESS YOU.                     



  keyaa1 posted 5 mnths ago

Sue

Thanks for your kind words.Yes a fairy tales are always loved. Forests and woods are the essential elements which add to the character. I am glad you enjoyed this one. Keep coming.



  Sue Menon posted 5 mnths ago

Nupur,

This one was beautiful!  who can resist a fairy tale, that too set in an enchanted forest. Your style of narration and the vivid imagery made the story come alive.



Sue



  keyaa1 posted 5 mnths ago

Simmu

Thanks for your sweet words. Yes this one touches deep in a very different way. Am happy you loved reading this one.

keep coming



  keyaa1 posted 5 mnths ago





Indu

Thanks for your kind words. Yes this is a different kind of happiness.



L Rao

Thanks for your warm words. Yes this was a bit sad but what I feel is the boy found his own world of happiness. The other story  - wizard one was like "think before you wish..your wishes might come true." That is a great compliment 'addicted to my stories" you make my day. Thanks a ton.Keep coming I look forward to read your comments.




Kalyanee

Thanks for your comments.Keyaa has own favorites. This one is not for her though.Keep coming



  simmu posted 5 mnths ago

i loved this fairy tale................it was sad by the end but it made for the saying...."it touches u deep down". 





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